Relationship and Dating Advice from The Guy’s Perspective: Online Dating Part 3 – Writing a great online description
Posted by One of the Guys on January 19th, 2012and was filed in How to, Videos with 2 responses, what do you think?
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Video Script:
Here is another profile we rewrote.
This is what we were sent.
Before:
I love tennis. I try and play tennis 4 days a week and I’m looking for someone who is athletic and able to keep up. Other than tennis, I like reading, going for walks, good conversation and movies. I spend a lot of time with my grandchildren so the person I’m looking for must appreciate kids. It would be nice if you had kids yourself so we would have something to share. I have a good sense of humor and expect the same from the person I’m dating. I don’t like talking about the weather. I like to have meaningful conversations. I’m ultimately looking for a good partner who is young at heart and open to exploring new things.
After: (Our rewrite)
The two things I love doing the most are playing tennis and spending time with my grandchildren, and not necessarily in that order. Otherwise I would describe myself as a contrast in styles.
Smart humor engages me, but not at the expense of others.
I’m shy, but love to debate.
I can still run hard, but prefer a nice walk with a friend.
I have my own interests, but family is most important.
I’m a person of action, but love to read about other people’s lives.
Routines are great, but spontaneity appeals to me as well.
Small talk is not my thing, but mainly because the world is too interesting to talk about the weather.
So if this speaks to you, I would love to have a conversation with you. I only ask a few things: that you’re young at heart, curious, and still open to exploration. And it certainly wouldn’t hurt if you were a tennis player with a sense of humor!
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I love what you said about the letter having too many demands. Who wants to go out with anyone who shows how fussy they are right off the bat. You’re right, it’s not inviting at all. Your rewrite made the person sound much more interesting, likeable and flexible. Good advice.
Thank you Janet for your kind words.